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Old 10-16-2015, 12:05 AM   #7
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Ullr, OK so I'll be straight up with you like I always am with voting, anywho you basically had everything I hate in one verse. It started off slow and hard on the eyes, then when I thought it was picking up it slowed back down and fell back into a typical topical kill myself from so much struggles in life type of read. Feel me? Your mechanics are good, and I know u can do better than this just not my cup of tea this week my dude. Too bland you need more ideas.

Frank, your mechanics always have bewildered me. Not always a bad thing, depends on how dope the imagery and/or storyline is that you present. This one was gold on both ends. Still waiting to see an epic frank verse this season though. Also not sure about your ending, seemed out of place tbh should've went a different route.

V. Frank for the better material
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