Jeso, it's nice to see you competing old friend. It's been a long time. When I think of your writing what comes to mind is that generic style you used to post over and over again which got very dull to me however this topic suited you well and you wrote to it well. It was a good call with the two verse approach as the reader knew exactly what to expect after the first verse and you delivered. This was well written sir, hope you stick around.
2000, a bit of a different approach for you. Still the same outcome of the verse. You went with rhyming couplets but still wrote as if you weren't sure how you wanted the outcome to be. Felt on topic in brief flashed but then off topic for the majority of the time. You ever referred to writing the verse in a line. Completely opposite of what you want to do. Get in the mind of a character or something man. Gotta try something new!
One sided affair here in my eyes
+1 Jesodist
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