Rakontur - this shit had me on the edge of my seat with the suspenseful details you drizzled throughout this piece. You're pretty damn good. I caught the ending 4 lines before the finish, but by my fortune teller powers that was far to late to sense a Telegraph. I really like that it kept me guessing. That shit was awesome. Great word usage and decent language and flow as well. It came off like gladiator, and ended in a way that would make Kobayashi proud. Good job.
Flo real- bruh. I hadta go back to the top and read how the fuck Aladdin died, then I laughed even harder than I did reading the ending. A splinter? Really? This was pretty cool as a story though. Not sure who the winner is in all this, perhaps the feeling of dying? Death? The sultan grim reaper? All in all, this was pretty good and the angry comical aspect picked this up a few notches. Good job bro.
I liked these pieces both for the ease of the read and the interpretation of the topic. You both showed interest and that always comes through in the work, sloppy or not. That said, this came down to who did better overall. MVGT Rakontur for the more interesting and well-crafted piece.
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