Mr j
I had to read your verse 3 times to catch on to everything because at first it read as 2 verses put together until I realized the setting was created from the beginning and I had just overlooked it lol this was a cool drop, son vs father; criminal vs cop; i just got done watching the latest Gotham episode and it felt like it could have very well been an episode in it so that's cool that it has that kinda morbid yet ironic sense of humor to it. I always have trouble with the dark/twisted type storylines myself so it makes them more appreciated from me because they're harder for me to create. The flow really picked up about halfway through which is part of the reason it felt as 2 separateverses at first but i enjoyed the progression and switch up alot.
Solid drop man
Spoken
As with the majority of your pieces this has a tight knit flow from the start and the verbiage was above average. As with Mr J's I had to read your verse a few times also to catch it all. The beginning left me with a description lacking just a bit and wondering if they were on a raft or boat crossing to America from Cuba or if that was somethin the parents did. I understood the rest of it clearly enough that was just my initial question with the setting. Other than that I really enjoyed this piece and it read quickly with that flow. The question at the end was a nice touch too because alot of times the questions don't really make me question shit but with my own issues with my actual father nearly abandoning me after my mom passed it was a question I almost wanted to answer with a bold NO right off the top lol
Overall this was a dope battle with two vets that I think have both done stronger verses in the past but seemed to be rushed or maybe just uncertain of your own concepts until you really got into the verses lol
But for this battle I gotta go with Mr J's verse based on the fact it had a slightly more clear setting from the start. Dope battle guys
Vote Mr j
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