new formations, defences had began to emerge
and gradually blended in the mass of the earth
Patterns had surfaced but water was crucial
the plastics had purpose with all of it neutral
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I thought this was pretty cool, its easy to see that Lars influence in you
I enjoyed the start of this piece to the very end, some of the rhyming was dumbed down
but you still carried my enthusiasm throughout the piece with some dope imagery
I kind of wished this was longer so I could see more build up to the end
either way I feel as though you shined minus some of the simpler rhymes
dope work brah
Mind boggling loneliness that comes with the turf
I've seen plenty of "people" but no one's alive on this earth
All brainwashed and apathetic since arriving from birth
I almost wish I were them to survive with this hurt.
It makes me question existence, existential conversations evolve,
Unlike ourselves within this minds of us all.
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now this I liked, its amazing to say the least i feel as though people dont give you much credit
you grasp onto an example of life & flip it to work with your topic and I really enjoyed it
so Id give you the same advice as I gave MMLP I wish that it was longer, you both used simpler rhymes
but you bumped heads quite nicely when it comes to your own ideas
nice work here regardless brah
v/I feel like both competitors are evenly matched here, the work they dropped suited both of them
I feel the most impressive thing is the different point of views both writers brought to the table
both brought that short yet explosive detail that launched them beyond my expectation
its refreshing to see other writers use a shorter approach with impressive flows...
this is another one of the tougher battles I have had the honor of voting on....
I wish both of you would have went all out with the line limit building on what you had
but we were all strapped for time...ahhh...
Im going with YDK on this one, he impressed me to the point I wanted to see more
both did that actually, yet YDK brought the more memorable piece, nice battle fellas
v/YDK
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