Twisting the truth within the vision of youth
a mission uncouth toward division and feuds
feeding a system upheld by prisons and fuel
its ligaments spool and trap within them the fool
that knows not his place but lives willing their tool.
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I really wished that you would have kept this scheme going, i thought that was nice
from the moment you first stepped on the scene I figured you'd bring something new
and you didnt disappoint, I thought the concept of your piece was pretty impressive
your flow was nice, and some of the word choices and placement messed with me a bit
but other then that I felt you brought a cohesive piece that worked to your abilities
i kind of wished this was longer but I feel like you pieced it together to fulfill its need
nice work here brah...
Frank,
Its always hard to quote something coming from one of your pieces usually
what it is, is that you choose to use the fully formed story writing aspect of topics
you bring ideas to life that fit the whole concept of what it is that you tend to do
which is, write your ass off. Ive got to say this is one of your more impressive pieces
where a majority of the time you seem to be off the wall or just plain not here
you shake it off and drop a great piece, although I dont like how the beginning of the line got repetitive because I do that a lot and try to steer away from that, you really bring it with a smooth touch...nice work
v/This battle seems unfair on Ullrs behalf due to the amount of work Frank provides
although I feel if Ullr brought more of a bulkier piece this may have been a great battle
Ullr brought some dope ideas and had some interesting aspects going for his use of the topic
the best part being the part I quoted, I feel that had he brought more of a showing it would have been great
but i have to give this to Frank for the all around enjoyment form his verse
nice battle fellas
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