Vivid, I'm mixed on this piece. Though it is somewhat creative I still feel troubled connecting with the concept on a personal level and some of the wording in the piece. It almost seemed more like a hipster kinda piece or someone just kinda dwelling over pussy lol. Besides a couple lines, on a technical aspect, the writing was pretty nice. Rhyme scheme was consistent though could've been a bit more creative. Overall a good read, just not a personal preference in style and concept choice.
Timeless, another nice read from you fella. I really felt the wording on this was smooth and couldn't find any lines that made me want to bicker or nit pick. From start to finish it remained fluent. Concept wasn't anything spectacular but I clicked with it a bit more than Vivid's. Flow was definitely nice. Rhyme scheme felt a bit more creative than Vivid's. Overall a good read.
Vote Timeless, just preferred his more. Could go either way.
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