a Friendly Sparring,
Not like other countries across the world Violently Warring,
This is a movie where no one will be Evidently Starring,
These riddles are in no way foul or Venomously Scarring,
Instead they come from a seasoned writer Benevolently Talking,
To the enemy on the horizon globe Arrogantly Charging,
Fooling people with mysterious oaths Malevolently Haunting,
So they are ones angelic men will be Definately Stopping,
This fight is one they Intentionally Starting,
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this was as far as I got because the flow started to get silly
the word choices up to this point were used nicely to your advantage
I also stopped because after quoting this section that this is a huge ass piece
at what point will I get back to this? I do not know...but know this
I enjoyed this intro based on your ideas and your concepts brought together
nice work & one of these days I will get back to the rest...until then heres a smiley face :(
oops I frowned
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