[Mr. J]

This was pretty sweet brah, the imagery throughout is awesome
I enjoy the impeccable wording you bring to the table, its amazing
the poetic prose brings added enjoyment to the very end, bravo
this was some of the nicer work Ive read lately that Ive been able to enjoy
some nice work right up in this section here

Those tears in your eyes,
wipe away as soot,
but your body still screams.
Would you stop them if you could?

Sometime after noon,
somewhere in the trees,
you tried to take your breath away
to see how you could breathe.

I liked that carrying into the tambourine man section
it paints a scenery as well as adding a certain perspective in few words
smooth work here man..