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Old 10-10-2015, 06:16 PM   #17
Razah
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Nigma
Enjoyable verse. The rhyme scheme in the beginning was pretty slick. Butt, I kind of lost interest half way through the verse. I like the angle you used for this verse.

Mr. J
the peak became hidden beyond clouds, in this upward battle..

I like lines like that. Simple, but they paint a picture in my mind. Dope. Not a fan of how you ended it though. Really solid start, but towards the end it just wasn't as good.


So, I feel like Nigma had a better verse technically, as far as writing mechanics go, considering Mr. J had the more simply verse. I just had a hard time piecing all of Nigma's verse together, while Mr. J's was much more 'complete' in that regards.

Good battle though. Can go either way, but Im'a vote for:


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