This was surprisingly close tbh
I haven't read much if anything from either of you that I can remember and I was happy to see both you have a solid grasp on writing.
Mmlp had a very clean yet simple verse. A story that wasn't overly complex but had smooth rhymes progression and easy transitions. It will be interesting to see you elevate and incorporate deeper stories as we go through the season.
Bb had a story I related to more with the substance abuse type shit. While it was moreccomplex it lacked the cleanliness mmlp had with the lines. Some of the wording was slightly off like "damn relate" just felt awkward to me. Not a bad verse by any means just needed to be tightened up a bit with the wording and lines
Good battle here guys but I got mmlp taking this with a slightly more polished verse
Vote mmlp
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