razah really nice drop. somber atmosphere, strong emotion, strong mechanics. no real misses for me. the size of this verse strengthened it. strongest critique would be near the end of the third line, you need a comma after mimic haha. solid verse
nyc, also showed with strong writing, lots of nice visuals in the first quarter. the segment about catching the pugilists fists was awesome. biggest criticism for verse is an overall lack of cohesive finality with the topic in the last half of your verse, in my opinion. the floor hockey reference (even tho i know you gave a hair flip with your sick flow while writing it) stuck out like a sore thumb, only because of how cool your wording and references were in the first quarter. had a monk-like zen karate guru feel and i feel the verse woulda been more delicious if you stuck with that tone
really enjoyed both reads. even tho nyc didn't have many misses at all, razah felt a lot more polished. every line was high quality are the verse was consistently on topic.
+1 Razah
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