Nigma – I enjoyed your first few lines. Most of all, I enjoyed the mechanical progression. Very planned. Perhaps it comes naturally, but either way.. the gradual way you eased into your voice/flow worked well for you with this piece, particularly. I’m not sure why, but this was my favorite bar.
I eye the sky like a pirate with the higher ground and scout horizons
Tilt my neck back, chin up, break down existence and drown in science
Even if it was based on aa slanted assonance, I think that was dope. The next few lines were a little disjointed but hey, what acid trip isn’t. that worked for this verse a lot. I didn’t really feel your conclusion. Perhaps, no limits didn’t rhyme at all. Or maybe.. you thought it was good enough and called it a day. Shit I’ve done it once or twice. Follow through next time.
Mr. j – well. You pretty much just jumped head first into this battle. The effect in this case is gratifying.
Strength via transition is hard to acquire. Well, you have it here, sir.
the senses rush, each thought is filled with hope for blind success
awaiting the end, where I can lay my head & put the mind to rest
rhymes are fucking on point. I like how your scheme switched around.
But your last lines .. that quote was on point.
/v Mr. J – this battle was hard to vote on. I can tell both tried their asses off. you both did very well. Yet, I can’t really put one piece against eachother in their entirety. But the ending.. the oh so important ending, well. J nailed his. Coherence, cohesiveness, follow through if you will.. gave him the /v this day, in my honest and oh so humble opinion.
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