This was cool to read. Both doing unconventional things with there verses to get it done in a quicker than normal time.
Fraze, went with the (essentially) one rhyme scheme type of drop and pulled it off mechanically wise. Felt the wording was strong for what you set to accomplish and had a cool depiction of the topic with the whole perception of shadows theme. Verse turned out pretty good
YDK, wasn't too keen on your first two lines, awkward wording to me, but after then I was digging it. This was a lot of nameplay stuff, but also had engaging content that kept my attention. Liked the finality in your closing bar, solid finish.
Conceptually both were similar with the light/dark references, but YDKs verse had a deeper level of thought put into it, was more engaging for me, and provided the better read. Really close battle though, I like these short ones.
+1 YDK
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