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Old 10-09-2015, 02:24 PM   #10
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fraze - A bit on the vague side for me. I can decipher a couple of parts but really it's all a bit overly vague for me to properly enjoy it. Very good wording choices and some good poetic techniques to connect the flow up throughout as well.

YDK - A few downsides with the repeated words throughout but nothing too bad. A quick enough drop, and again I like to see you stick to what you're best at and delivery something really personal to either yourself or the protagonist rather than narrate a commentary drop, but this was still a solid little drop.

Overall, both clearly rushed but dropped some really solid pieces for rushjobs. I think one was just a little bit clearer and cleaner which is more to my liking.

MVGT - YDK
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