Nigma - Like the guys above said, lyrically and the way you connected up words was really solid, but it seemed a little bit disconnected and directionless. "Cerebral" is actually the perfect word. I wasn't really sure about anything that was happening. I believe the protagonist is an acid dropping genius but I can't even be sure about that. I found it a bit hard to relate to and as a result I didn't enjoy the finer aspects you managed to perfect.
Mr J - Although the rhyming was a little basic, specifically in relation to Nigma's verse, it started off with a really effortless flow to it. Around the time you started pressing enter and put the rhyme on the second line for some reason, I felt the flow got a little bit fractured. The story was much clearer than Nigma's, but I'm not really sure why you thought this would be enough for a championship match. "Man is tackling some difficult stuff in his old age after once reading this quote". That's my entire take away, and it seems very simplistic for a topical this late in the day. I also felt that it wan't entirely thought out. The switch to the journal didn't really seem to have any pattern to it. Usually I'd like to see someone weave in and out of narration and the protagonist's thoughts or something.
Overall, I'm surprised that this wasn't a better competition. Nigma easily had the better lyricism, but I'm not sure any of us really pick up on the full etenent of what he's talking about. Mr J was a lot clearer, but I also felt that it was a little bit like making a fried egg in the Masterchef final. I could see people going either way, but since I wasn't a big fan of either's storytelling, I'll go with the verse that had a few more elements.
MVGT - Nigma.
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