kicking astroll Piglet trips and then rolls
and tumbles to the ground calling
"Ohoh! Silly me, I've gone and slipped in the cold!"
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This was just funny as hell to me, I really laughed my ass off here
well anyway.. after reading it one more time I thought this was nice take on unfolding a story
having a voice for the characters with their characteristics almost down to the stitches
I thought your verse was fun and it really showcased a different take on topicals funwise
if that makes sense otherwise I feel like you brought a fun twist here and painted a nice little story
nice work buddy
Piglet then came asking where was Winnie the Poo?
I started ***kling, but not because I was feeling amused
But, because I realized this was just a silly cartoon.
This is why Poo bear’s allegorical death means little to you
Imaginary figments are expected to dwindle and lose
The importance they had when you were in your infancy and youth.
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GC took an alternate route with this verse didnt you
adding a more grim approach as well as some interesting concepts
I really enjoy your verses due to their length & strength in ideas
although this time I was twisted by your words of who was voicing what
at which point I felt and overwhelming anxiety to read it again
the twist is an odd one and takes another read to take what you did all in
either way I felt you delivered a stellar verse here my friend..
v/I wish I could give this to Ullr, his verse was really enjoyable to read
it was short, it made me laugh my ass off, and it delivered a well balanced use of character development
it was odd at points? but you strike me as an odd one regardless so I wont hold it against you.
but then I read unborn complexs verse and Im like daaaaaaamn
I cant imagine how you decided to go this route but Im glad you did
it was more dark than you usually are with your verses but I enjoyed your journey
the progress worked well & the ideas unraveled nicely...
smooth work here fellas you really came here for the fisticuffs today
dope battle
v/GodComplexBuddha
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