The most vivid of lyrics couldn't mirror the pain
Of your soul being judged through the picture it paints
& the paint brush is made from the fire inside
Thoughts lie in my mind, like death, colliding with life
& light overcomes as I rise with the tide
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I really enjoyed how this section of the verse worked out
I didnt like how you ended it with the sky will be dry scenario..
but you showcased your talent of using less to say a lot more
the flow of your rhymes carries the story quicker & it blends well
I liked the intro to the verse & the ending was cool, nice work brah
NYC, your verse was pretty sick from beginning to end
I instantly had flashes of Tarantino throughout the beginning
and as the verse unfolded I felt like I was staring at an extravagant napkin
in fact I digested properly so I didn't have to ruin the story with my messy hands
therefore I will say as you continue towards the end I felt the ending could have been better, I didn't like how the ended up in the city & whatnot
otherwise I enjoyed the verse as a whole and didn't want to break it up too much
still one of the better writers in the AOWL at this moment, stick around big fella
v/Although a piece of me wants to give this to Razah I cannot do so..
looking back though I really did enjoy his verse for the mechanics involved
that rapid fire flow working between the plot of the story made this great
yet after reading NYCs monstrous verse you were a tad overwhelmed
NYCs story came with a nice blending of storytelling & a slight glimpse into character
making it work for him with his brandished style & stronger use of vocab at times
both came with well-rounded verses but the stronger style wins here
v/NYC
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