Sovereign, definitely a different style than the style I used this week but not far from the style I normally write. I just figured I'd fuck around with the topic I had since I wasn't liking it. Anyways. I liked the story and your rhyme scheme was nice. I feel like your internal rhyming could've been heavier, but your external rhymes were on point. I seems your prime focus was the story so you give and take technically. That's fine. I enjoyed this from start to finish. Keep writing.
Vivid, this was also nice. I don't feel like your writing was as cleanly polished as Sovereign's but I feel like you held your ground in the story department. Your rhyme scheme could've been more exciting and your wording could've been smoother at times but overall it was still an enjoyable read.
It almost felt like a short story battle instead of a topical battle lol. Yes. You both had rhyme schemes but were both way more into your story telling than anything.
Vote Sovereign for the more polished read. Cool battle.
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