V, I liked this verse for what it is. Not as visual as you I thought it would be considering the opener. Detailed verse entailing a fucked culture in which we live. I did not like how you kept calling him greuber, then third stanza it became "my". That irked me a tad. Other then that, solid read for this tree huger.
U, very vivid here. What I most liked about this verse was how you kept hidden the main animal until the end. That was a nice touch. Decent rhymes but nothing earth shattering. I enjoyed verse through and through. The action was sly and imagery clear
v/ Ullr
better verse in my eyes
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