ayo, this was a pretty tight battle...
flo real i liked this verse a lot and am very impressed that u busted it out in 10 minutes. It was pretty heavy laden with cool imagery and a stream of scenarios related to a battle atmosphere. I took it as a tree seedling fighting against the fact that he ends up in a pot of some sort limiting his potential. Cool shit bruv.
eth shit was smooth.
Or this sour stench which always discon-certs
As teachers sweat through the armpits of their discount shirts
Crumbled notebooks packed with sketches and scrawls
A prisoner to this 3 o’clock bell on the wall
^^^ nasty
My thing is I thought the 1st stanza was dope but I thought parts of the second stanza were horrible. I just don't like platitudes that much and thought it lacked a certain depth and clarity. some forced stuff like "wish I'd wrote" instead of wished I'd written to force a rhyme seems egregious to me...also felt the ending was anticlimactic. But I'm probably focusing too much on negatives here, because with the polish and thought of verse 1 multiplied or maintained in verse 2, you truly would've had a dope verse here.
mvgt - eth
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