Timeless- I envy this angle. We've all had our dramatic scene with Frank or at least have witnessed one and once upon a time I was gonna write something like this. That said, this was kinda cool directly in-line with the subject, seeing as how battle tactics aren't usually taken to tropicals. Calling Frank Francis was a nice touch.
Thought, "I'll log into Red Glare and bring the title home.
Might even battle myself with two flows of a tidal cloned."
Forever left his integrity at the door but let his spinal roam.
Picked at the skeleton in his closet until the final bone.
This section stuck out to me even though at times the language was awkward (saying the same word twice, etc.) for the sake of rhyming. I still kinda liked this piece. Not as aggressive as I would have expected from this angle, but it was still cool.
Frank- ummm... This was sort of unexpected. You wrote a book, albeit a very descriptive book, that lended nothing to the subject until the last line. Well, in all fairness you both did that very thing. I will commend you on the fact that you focused on your strengths. I MO you did way too much in the wrong direction for me. I just felt like it was too much of a read for it all just to come down to the last line. I don't know. Usually you're more on track than this. For what it was, it was amazing. I will give you that. Good job to you both. Really.
This is hard to judge because my bias against Frank makes me wanna be swayed by timeless's piece, but Frank is a scholarly writer and I can't deny him his winning traits. MVGT Frank for having the overall better piece, seeing as how there wasn't enough done by timeless to actually take this.
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