The names in this match-up make this seem like an intriguing read, and though its been awhile since I last read a topical verse, from past experiences, I'm pretty shocked at what transpired here. Both pieces weren't bad and both weren't what I'd expect from both writers. Obviously, Frank comes with his traditional end rhyme scheme, and a lot of times it works great with his content, but here it's pretty off from what I know he can do. I think despite his scheme not being up to par, the story comes off awkward, especially in connection with the image, which the only thing I can take from it is the rainbow colors because the story was about a young boy being raped by a butler? I don't know man. It was hard to read through the story but I did. It ended very weird. Flashes of some good writing but mostly the story itself wasn't all that good. Mr. J came with an approach I'd probably have gone with, an abstract, thought driven piece filled with some cool lines here and there, though others kind of came off bland. Nonetheless, I see the cohesion with the image here more than Frank's story, and the piece flowed much cleaner too. I believe Frank went way over his head in this one, delivering a disturbing story whereas J came with a more feasible piece that used elements of the image more clearly, and wrote a more interesting story in the end.
MVGT- Mr. J. Good job by both competitors.
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