[Mr. J]

PP...

I have no idea what you had going on here, it just came across weird
some of it was nice but a majority of it just had me waiting for the journey to end
you have more shining moments but the random thoughts pouring out take away most praise
I find myself doing this on and off when it comes to your week by week performance
I'd suggest a break, maybe take a moment to experience life & return with knowledge
either way I found a majority of your ideas to work and not work, at least you showed...

Flo,
I'm enthused by your work this is a switch up from last weeks performance
you really showed your ability to be versatile & work to your topic to the best of your ability
it's easy to hang onto every word due to hit being a quick read, yet its effective
you draw on different elements to make the piece become more well rounded...

v/I feel as though Flo swept PP in all categories while having the better showing
PP came with some decent ideas, I wish he would have taken a moment out to touch up some lines
chop down a sentence or two or 7 allowing yourself to showcase your stronger points
Flo kept it to a mere paragraph & a half it seemed like, the concept just flowed well
nice battle though, 2000 puttin' in more work it looks like..