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Originally Posted by Pharaohs Army
(oh)i know what they sayin now: "jilti is Padding-'is-Record"- but even though you've beaten me,Previously
real emcees know- that i'm actually better..
i don't need til mon-day for sharp words and tactical letters
this bar structure is fucking weird. you gotta come dope to pull this kinda shit off and this was meh. punch is also kinda nonsense.
and if you've started another 1 of your Half-Ass\lame-ass Drops u will have 2 amend it
hmu in the pm's u overrated fuck- igots battle Concepts ta lend you.
cryin about the streets 'v L.A.. 'en "you dunno what i BEEN thru!" :-(
i have no idea what this is supposed to mean. it does feel like i diss but i couldn't tell you why or how.
here i am Again Dude.. what u gonna DO?
and don't even start , with those Mixed Martial Arts
perceived as a relative novice, i said to myself
"i have a decent Chance- with HIM on the card."
i like some of the internal rhymes here but this is a battle. you need to attack stronger than this.
but hey, jilti, don't feel bad- you can't win'em all
i know you're busy anyway, living the hood life- writing garbage on Internet Forum WALLS.
weak diss, but this is in the direction of better
i mean. fuck, was i the start of your fall?
was it my Fault?,
u got jealous when you saw your bitch's phone 'n how she Took all my Calls?
she was pleading me"traverse the country"- so she could suck on my balls.
this is a diss but you're still missing any sort of punch.
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Originally Posted by jilti
this like our fourth time battling. sword, knife stabbin' ribs in
everyone'll see how much Guts the Army has without ever going on a mission
meh. you can do better than this.
listen.. it's saturday night, bout to Head Out the Door y'all
hopefully u do the same when driving by a center divider reinforced wall
wording is off here. need this to be harsher.
close to fallin off the edge. at the Breaking point, feeling pissed
one little twitch'll make me Snap,Arm.. then you'll know what mma really is
light but this is ok.
silly kid. ur verse ran outta steam early. fizzled out between wording
but we don't have to wait til the end to Catch a Phar Fade, & see him hurtin'
not feeling this
this girlie not a child of the military, but its the same meaning too
cuz when u hear Army Braaat.. that's me calling ur name when i shoot
light. kinda meh, kinda ok.
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jilti didn't really seem very into this battle and pharaoh seems to be still getting used to text battling so this was a little disappointing to me. jilti ive definitely seen better stuff from you, but i guess you saw his verse and didn't really care.
pharoah was interesting to read, but more for the unusual structure and rhyme schemes than any of the battle content. seems like you might be transitioning from a different writing style, so keep in mind the biggest thing is battles is to bring the punches. you need some sort of flip or interesting concept for your bars.
either way, i have jilti winning this with a better verse, even if it had a few weak points.
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