I can only take from Franks that we were getting a insight into his life. I assume that you were Steve in this. Im glad that you are able to share these experiences with the group but while maybe therapeautic it may be better to hand this document to the appropriate authorities.
Although they may not read it as its simple one internal along with a stupidly simple end rhyme hardly grabbed the readers attention.
Also you go onto describe the amount of noise that they are creating while you got raped with a cucumber but say you suffered in silence... well... its hardly suffering silence. I think a better use of words could have emphysised the fact what your trying to say is you were silent so not to let anyone know how much you were enjoying the surprise sex.
Regardless this was an ok read if not a very sad confession of why you were a day late posting last week.
Mr.J. you really captured the image in your piece and i really enjoyed the lucid reverie that seemed to jump out from your words as if in a state of purgatory between two very vast worlds. There was beautiful flow great vocab internals and multis. Loved this so much i read it twice.
For that reason alone i vote Mr.J
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