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UnbornBuddha · 09-22-2015, 08:52 PM

YDK: A social commentary on conceptual platitudes that while valid in some respect are not the most intriguing. Mostly because to make them interesting one has to sprinkle in a more encompassing viewpoint, concepts such as "land of the free" poor vs rich, corporate dominion are tasteless. In fact, I can go to youtube and within a few minutes I'm sure some elitist conspiracy video will pop up, not that it might not have value, but in terms of your topic you really did not take any chances. Now, there were glimpses of something more special here and there, but they were not the norm. "Murica, lol, you should of taken a comedic angle here, and it would have served you well. It was written solidly, but somewhat bland in terms of presentation.

Nigma: I really liked the prophetic and otherworldly aspect of this. Sometimes the wording is a bit strange as I'm processing it, particularly the second stanza. Nevertheless, the actual material was engaging and carried the reader well throughout the journey. which it was. This was also technically sound, aside from strange algorithms in your diction here and there, I have no gripes really. You have a knack for developing quirky concepts and narratives and while they do backfire at times, due to losing the reader, this was not the case here. And so,

Vote: Nigma

09-22-2015, 08:52 PM	#12
UnbornBuddha Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 1,008 Battle Record: 23-10 Champed - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 5 Rep Power: 23856379	YDK: A social commentary on conceptual platitudes that while valid in some respect are not the most intriguing. Mostly because to make them interesting one has to sprinkle in a more encompassing viewpoint, concepts such as "land of the free" poor vs rich, corporate dominion are tasteless. In fact, I can go to youtube and within a few minutes I'm sure some elitist conspiracy video will pop up, not that it might not have value, but in terms of your topic you really did not take any chances. Now, there were glimpses of something more special here and there, but they were not the norm. "Murica, lol, you should of taken a comedic angle here, and it would have served you well. It was written solidly, but somewhat bland in terms of presentation. Nigma: I really liked the prophetic and otherworldly aspect of this. Sometimes the wording is a bit strange as I'm processing it, particularly the second stanza. Nevertheless, the actual material was engaging and carried the reader well throughout the journey. which it was. This was also technically sound, aside from strange algorithms in your diction here and there, I have no gripes really. You have a knack for developing quirky concepts and narratives and while they do backfire at times, due to losing the reader, this was not the case here. And so, Vote: Nigma Last edited by UnbornBuddha; 09-22-2015 at 08:59 PM.