Flo- I just couldnt really catch a rhythm with u. It was like u forcd an imagery when that shouldnt be the case. It should be picture perfect when ur reading someones verse. U painted nice steokes from here to there but nothing consistent to lead me on a smooth read all the way thru. I get the gest and idea of it all but it just fell flat to me. Dont get me wrong it was cool but from a competitive aspect.. it didnt turn out like I suspected it to be.
Frank- u showed off your writing ability with such ease and proving it here with such a disgusting tooic take really. It was just an absurd read but u made it work toyour unorthodox style of frank style. Regardless I am basing this on the verse itself not its take and u had smooth transitions. The flow was choppy here and there but it still stayed intact thru out.
V/ frank for a better read.
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