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Old 09-17-2015, 10:27 AM   #9
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Flo had a decent verse but I felt it was all over the place because your had to keep the structure for your concept. I liked the idea you went with but the execution felt lacking, the flow kinda skipped here and there and the wording could have been sharper but still a cool piece.
Frank, I liked the first half but was a little disappointed at the ending. It felt like you just ran out of metaphors and concepts to fit in and just used it as a piece to take a shot at everybody. Sayin you shit on everybody was more of you shitting on yourself and trying to blame other people lol I've seen and even done my own pieces taking shots at people with topicals but this was probably in the lower tier in that category.
But the wording and flow were all on point and still had better execution than flos this week so I gotta give my vote to you.
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