[EtH]

Flo Real - I always find that there is a massive limitation on anti-societal or anti-political pieces. It's something everyone's done before and they often open up any new chapters, and I think that's kind of the same here. I also don't really see how Mercy fits into this as much. Maybe I'm missing something but it seemed like you were unfavourable to people being given something which they don't earn, which of course is the original topic, but when I think of mercy I don't really think of it being like "People taking things they didnt earn" I think of someone with a gun to their head begging for their life. Acrostic styles don't add too much for me, unless they reveal a hidden message. Something that is revealed when the verse is REALLY looked at. Because you made your first letters bold, I kind of felt that you gave away the hidden secrets. I know this is a competition so you wouldnt want to be overly subtle with something like that, but as I said in the first place I'm not really into acrostic poems. I don't get what additional emotion or purpose they provide.

Frank - What the absolute fuck. Now I know you're fucking crazy when you write topicals but you always kind of get taken back by reading them. I'm not 100% sure of the reference. I don't get the reference to the moderator really and while I could get the purpose I feel there is information which alludes me. One massive let down which I've been seeing tonnes lately is the broken multis. I'm not sure what's happening but whenever I read a topical now it's like people have forgotten that syllables must match up in each part of the scheme. You tried to carry the scheme throughout all of this but when one line has "injured and hurt - 4 syllables", the next has "lifted her - 3 syllables" and the next has "scissored - 2 syllables", every ounce of how impressive an entire verse is gets thrown out the window. I have a feeling I'm missing loads here and that everything has a place and purpose. You carried the story of the carrier pigeon well but this felt like the opening sequence of MGS 5. I have no idea what's happening, everything's crazy and I have no idea what's real and what's not. Frank to the fullest haha. I'm thinking MAYBE this is you, sending out a random carrier pigeon, who's metaphor I don't have, bringing a message to the AWOL league that you just shitted on them with this verse? Fuck I dunno.

Overall, hard one to call. While Flo Real has the easier to connect with verse, Frank I feel is clearly the better writer. It's a hard split but I'm going to go to the direction which I felt used more aspects and put more thought into it.

MVGT - Frank