2K - Yeah like the others said, you were just too basic in every area. The "rap" grammar you used. The simplistic rhyme scheme, you've been around long enough to avoid falling into these pitfalls so I'm gonna just assume you really rushed this.
Timeless - This was okay. Rhyming was pretty good and it flowed alright and if I pretend I didn't see "shutter to think" there isn't really any flaws with anything. I feel like I can't post much because the topic just didn't have any depth or enough layers for me to really get into it. You have the ability in writing alone but this piece is something I feel will be quickly forgotten based on the topic.
Overall, I feel this is an easy vote.
MVGT - Timeless.
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