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Old 09-15-2015, 11:23 PM   #9
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This is a very hard vote.

Nigma: You have this knack for an enigmatic display of imagery that subtly hints at the subject as it unravels. Sometimes, I won't lie the lines seem to be more strange, in the sense of how it connects to the topic on a greater scale. For example, sometimes you throw in this references that are kind of out of place and while it adds ambiance to your piece, it also adds a sense of confusion to the reader. Nevertheless, this was a strong piece and it gave a sense of satisfaction upon finishing it. Strong visuals and great flow.

Mr J: This is the style you utilize when facing opponents that are more linguistically diverse. Thus, you sacrifice partially your really smooth flow you're known for in replace for content. Which, I don't think there is anything wrong with. Just an observation. I like the phrasing here more than Nigma's every line felt more impactful in a way. By the way, "life is a bitch but the choices you make just don't concern her" I felt this line was terrible and needs to be mentioned. Besides, that line everything else was enjoyed. Like I said this stylistic choice you undertake is more philosophical as well as thought provoking giving more for the reader to chew on.

In the end, I enjoyed this one more thoroughly.
Vote: Mr. J
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