[Adonis]

Jay - "Time is not to taken lately". Well I enjoyed the final concept I think you nonchalantly through character and action in this verse almost carelessly. This is not to be taken as I did not like the verse, because that is not true. What I mean is simple, why an apple? Who is the cheating spouse and in that moment the voice of the writer became an adopted youth. I get these are all examples of moments essentially, at least that's what I feel you were going for there, but there just has to be a better way to bring up characters and actions while being able to connect the reader to each person in some way. The end of this verse was a very nice touch, you brought the concept full circle and finished strong. You gave time a voice in the closer which is hard to do, just the thought alone is dope concept, and while you executed decently, this verse is not perfect. But, for what it is, conceptually/aesthetically/mechanically, highly enjoyable as you continued staking a claim for #1 in power rankings.

Nigma - "The flames make a blackened pattern of where we came passing" great use of visual. The opening was dope. I can see this soul or spirit, the dead guy, on the beach trying to explain how he is beyond earth and what he sees and experiences. You gave me strong visuals and created a voice, a character which drew me in and held my interest, like a soap opera, I want to know what comes next. You started this verse in the end, or middle, or beginning of the end, this is always a nice touch. If I have the time to read and catch that structure it pulls me in because it's instant action you know? I did not like the Normandy concept, not sure if I'm missing something, but it seemed tossed into the verse because it rhymed well only, missing significance to the plot. "Pulled my soul away" Given the context you gave me this very intense visual of a soul not exiting the body, but the body letting the soul go. That sentence doesn't do you justice, but the image would be a dope picture topic alone.


This is a tough vote indeed. You both showed why you are in the contenders match as I can safely assume these will each respectively be two of the better verses of the season. Nigma has only a few battles this season but is rising quick, while jay has been a constant, not rising, just, there. Solid battle, two very well written verses with equally dope concepts. I must vote Nigma though. He gave me a stronger connection to a character while painting some very vivid pictures with his words. Jay had a dope concept as well, he lacked in other aspects in which nigma shined, thus securing a close vote in a marquee battle in which you both did your damn thing

v/nigma