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Frank · 09-13-2015, 07:55 PM

Vulgar...

How a Floridian could encapsulate such an ice cold vibe really takes superb imagination. You must draw inspiration from those rare 50 degree tropically winter days. Your writing is real Viking like when your at your best. What I think I mean by that is, you are in your element most when you are mythical and legendary and the stuff of ancient folk lore. You have the voice of a Warlock in real life, yet, you have the written word of a wealthy pauper. You are one of my favorite writers on the internet. A big inspiration and a undeniable influence on me and my own work. It appears your poetry is also poignant. To be perfectly honest - I am not a huge fan of poems that do not rhyme - though you have done your research and have the right idea - your meter reminds me of the Poets in the Colosseum - a dignified, nobleness to your beat. I loved the 'Rabbis came knocking' line - because when I think of the Rabbi and their naturally insulating, wintery beard and their father time curls and their wooly mammoth kappel hats - I think these guys can survive that type of weather, Am I right? Lol That concept may be abstract to you, but that was my interpretation. The 'stoned a toddler at sunrise' line, again, very chilling. 'Glass eggs and other fertility symbols in the hollow of the tree' made me feel like literally like baby in a crib playing with a toy. Jack frost would be proud of you my Floridian friend.

Spoken..
Mahalo nui loa na ho'olaule'a me la kaua lol storyteller is that you? Your writing has this uncanny Hawaiianess to it. You write in your Islands off beat Ole language. Anyways. I was going to venture off and write about this picture too, but I was strapped for time. Your fourth stanza was pitch perfect though. You really honed your own in that stanza. Look back and see what made that stanza work, cause in that stanza you came into your own.

Word.

MVGT Vulgar

Voting Vulgar

09-13-2015, 07:55 PM	#9
Frank Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 3,228 Champed - NWL Season 2 - Art of Writing League (5x) - Lime Green Poetry Association - AOWL Season 6 - AOWL Season 10 Rep Power: 3853347	Vulgar... How a Floridian could encapsulate such an ice cold vibe really takes superb imagination. You must draw inspiration from those rare 50 degree tropically winter days. Your writing is real Viking like when your at your best. What I think I mean by that is, you are in your element most when you are mythical and legendary and the stuff of ancient folk lore. You have the voice of a Warlock in real life, yet, you have the written word of a wealthy pauper. You are one of my favorite writers on the internet. A big inspiration and a undeniable influence on me and my own work. It appears your poetry is also poignant. To be perfectly honest - I am not a huge fan of poems that do not rhyme - though you have done your research and have the right idea - your meter reminds me of the Poets in the Colosseum - a dignified, nobleness to your beat. I loved the 'Rabbis came knocking' line - because when I think of the Rabbi and their naturally insulating, wintery beard and their father time curls and their wooly mammoth kappel hats - I think these guys can survive that type of weather, Am I right? Lol That concept may be abstract to you, but that was my interpretation. The 'stoned a toddler at sunrise' line, again, very chilling. 'Glass eggs and other fertility symbols in the hollow of the tree' made me feel like literally like baby in a crib playing with a toy. Jack frost would be proud of you my Floridian friend. Spoken.. Mahalo nui loa na ho'olaule'a me la kaua lol storyteller is that you? Your writing has this uncanny Hawaiianess to it. You write in your Islands off beat Ole language. Anyways. I was going to venture off and write about this picture too, but I was strapped for time. Your fourth stanza was pitch perfect though. You really honed your own in that stanza. Look back and see what made that stanza work, cause in that stanza you came into your own. Word. MVGT Vulgar Voting Vulgar __________________ *VETWORK* Last edited by Frank; 09-13-2015 at 07:58 PM.