Frank deserves so much credit here because he must of spent like... a long time writing this. I personally enjoyed the chess idea. I dont think it came off as well as it could and i think you could of done with less moves and more lines on each individual move if that makes sense. Sort of a play by play on each to keep the readers attention. Im an avid chess player and even i became bored by it. Slightly tedious. Shouldnt let the reader find it a chore. But mad props on the creativity of it i really enjoyed the freshness an was some fire lines in the midst of it all.
Ill be honest by the time i got to your third topic (why 3 im not sure) i became totally lost by if there was a grand scheme at hand where they all tied in or if you had simply not been able to decide which one was the best and put them all out. Sadly the last one from what i managed to digest had some of the best lines but again by this point it had become a chore reading it all. Sometimes less is more.
Lars was solid here as usual. It was the perfect length because it gave me enough to be happy but left me wanting a little bit more. Like fine dining. The flow was great especially as we got to the core of the piece. Vocab was nice as well.
Anyways... i vote lars
Good showing both
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