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Old 09-13-2015, 10:24 AM   #11
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We had live battler and former textcee @PurelyDef aka @Answer cast a vote!

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I'll open a whole clip. You ain't smashing ur own chick
You ain't EVER Honor Riffic. so that Guns extra polite how it won't Miss

Solid opener, I liked the honorific wordplay more than the general wording of the closer

I question ya livin'.. Don't think for a second you winnin'
If YOU talking bout 38 Snubs, it's just your current Record with Women

lmao, this was dope and comical

The Silencers oldschool Irish. Ain't no singing or blammin'
I'll come thru witha Potato and a Slug. that's without bringing the Famine

Real solid

We meltdown slugs & reuse straight from the gravel
Them boys got a Frequent Flyer Program. Trust I won't pay if they Travel

Ehh wasnt really digging this one

My gun sooo big I can't even carry it round in the streets!!
We call that piece the Microwave. It'll Spin you around with the Heat

This is good, wording couldve been more effective though

Orc's in the back with the Killer. Ya style is wack & I'm iller
Boy you ain't Great. you Grout, only Covering up Cracks with the Filler

Solid

U needa Iron Fist blammin' the Wesson. Cuz Ima bring the Tek in
ya whooole Family can get they Head ina Box. that's the Kazama's in Tekken

No

Lemme rearrange flows; I'm in ur babe home getting strange dome
Don't Sweater if it Looks Bad. & someone tell SuckaFree to change clothes

Not feeling this as a closer either



Orc's been battling for eons, he's got those dated punches that make you hurl
But my writing's the future, so-ma bars feelin' like a Brave New World

Not really digging this

Now watch this kid get a loss from me, bet everything's bitten, so honestly
It'd be more fittin' if every written came with a bibliography

Accusing someone of being a biter has no impact without some legitimate proof

It's like Whose Line when dude rhymes, hell it's almost prophecy
'Cause he's been tryin' Stiles that aren't his, that's what I'm callin' mockery

Not feeling the wording of this, otherwise its solid

Orc's broad'll flock to me, she texted "Netflix and chill?"
But he's more like Exxon than she lets on, she expected to drill

This is pretty solid, and while i like the wording of it flow-wise i feel like it could've hit harder if it was worded better

And when the weapon's concealed, it's like a couple simulatin' sex
'Cause if I can't put hands on this bitch then we bang-in' techs

Nah not feeling this. Text and Techs lines are kind of played out regardless

This classic'll turn to Blackfish if Orc'a get violent
Till-I-come back at 'em and now he's matchin' flows with Poseidon

Not feeling this, the orca concept could've been a little harder if you worked on it more

Catch Orc ridin' to prom, four's on me and I'll pull it soon
It'll stick this Orc-kid in his chest so his corsage is a bullet wound

This is pretty dope, probably your best bar of the verse

And they said you're Irish... so when I'm goin' to grab steel
I'll put a potato on the muzzle for an appropriate last meal

This is pretty dope, too. Strong closer


Orc started strong and kind of went flat towards the end, whereas I think riffic did the opposite. I found it funny that they both had potato bars and they kind of cancelled each other out as far as effectiveness is concerned - but it worked in Orc's favor since it was one of the few personals riffic capitalized on. I will say that Orc was incredibly redundant with the gunplay and also could've incorporated more variety and his verse was incredibly generic for the most part - but I felt like Orc's was just a tad bit more consistent and edged this out. It was a pretty close and debatable match-up regardless
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