Great writing man. Mad respect for the way you continued and got me as a reader so engaged in a very simple but effective story when taken literally on face value while keeping everything in tone for a much more deeper thought out metaphor on what we can take for granted etc.
I assume I am right with the above comments but if not... you got lucky haha. But no seriously shit was clever and I know while it was lacking in flow in some places how difficult it would have been to word everything to be a true Gemini drop
Nice work @
sraL