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Old 09-04-2015, 06:12 AM   #5
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HA! I recognise that style tbh

Prettty good verse, just obv the length isnt ideal for in here. We always want something more filling. 20-30 lines is about perfect. Your flows good though and it was cool to see you attempt more rigid schemes etc, the shorter line lengths help your flow no end.
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