this was a more vivid piece,very well written with the restrictions implied
and by 'restrictions' I mean your line use, and by line use I mean your number of lines
and by number of lines I mean your choice of words & your vision as it unfolds
a very nice use of words might I add, the flow of the piece is pretty smooth
fits a llot in without overworking it with a million other ideas going off at once
really showcases your use of words and how to paint something without saying much
good here but in other places may effect you to be worst off, regardless...nice work
I really enjoyed your ability to fit so much in with so little...keep writing
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