[Mr. J]

I thought this was pretty smooth, it had some interesting points
the word choice is the stand out here, this read slightly more poetic
especially after the..'but yes...I'm awake' I thought that came off playish
if you know what I'm saying regardless, you use your vocab to an advantage.
carrying the piece with some really nice ideas and also keeping the flow on point
you really showcase a versatility that works for you here...really nice work...