I had Dr. Dog winning here, he was more creative in his approach and execution. Originality is often a deciding factor for me in these and he did exceptionally well here to use the topic as a point to base an entirely new, different piece around. The topic wasn't his centrepiece. He used it as a launchpad if you like and built a poem around it, which was very nicely done.
He's always tended to excel with his wording I've felt and this one was prime Dr. Dog actually with titbits like "August held its last breath" which was such a dope way to open this up IMO.
Great visual imagery off bat to draw the reader in!
The night earlier, the nights, earlier showed a deft touch to his own game too here that maybe goes under the radar a lot of the time but those flashes of brilliance again are what sets him apart, for me at least. The subtlety is why it works.
Fraze: This is the first I've read from you in the LGPA and left me with no doubt you can write, you clearly have a grasp of the more technical elements of writing and I see a lot of potential. I did, however, feel like this one was wrote relatively quickly and wasn't you at your peak.
There's a lot to like but unfortunately you came up against an in-form Dr. Dog here and his approach to the topic at hand coupled with his writers voice and creativity are essentially what decided this for me.
Vote - Dr. Dog
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