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Old 04-29-2013, 10:22 PM   #11
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This was real nice storytelling. The imagery just flows in. The ending felt a little anticlimactic though, maybe it's just me, I dont enjoy happy endings in stories lol, and I felt like a murderous ending wouldve fit this piece much more.

In any case, this is still some decent writing. good job man
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