Disclaimer: I apologize I do not have much time to vote so it will be much more brief then usual. Life happens
Time wrote about eternal life and and how bad it could go I guess, a bit tough to follow because it needs more meat to it in order to explain fully. Decent verse although I didn't get how unraveling is akin to Cashius Clay omitting his first name? That sort of irked me because it didn't make sense to me at all, just rhymed. Poet wrote of a scenario and ensuing conversation about a pair of scientists talking about how polluted today's food is. This is actually an interesting topic to me because I know exactly who Monsanto is and what they do, this is shit I read about when ever I can, pretty much anything to help me gain knowledge in life in all honesty. The flow was a tad choppy though, example: Zombies to prep//Calmly step. Not complex enough of a scheme as it a simple syllable, which is fine, but the syllable count was still off and slightly hindered the flow. I did however like the verse even if you did not go into detail at all about where the scientists are. The shortness of the verse killed the build up where if you ended with some sort of twist saying where they are, lab rats, studying for the gov. anything, instead of just starting in a8, their room.
Anyways I got Poet Minder here
I simply connected with his on a higher level. While I did see what timeless did, writing from the perspective of a mummy (I read the verse again) thought that was witty, but again, tough for me to vote against someone who wrote a subject in which I love reading about freely.
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