[UnbornBuddha]

This was a nice battle. Enjoyed both takes.

Ullr, you kind of went the "Kim" route. I thought the reason for the husband's murdering of his wife was kind of cliche and upon the first two lines I already knew where it was heading. Thus, while well-written there were too many platonic ideas floating around in the first stanza. I think after the murder, the writing became more powerful and from there I have no quarrel. A good verse either way.

YDK: The way you approached this was more creative, the first stanza depicted an entry essentially of the woman's diary. I did find it kind of strange that as soon as the man read it she was already ready to commit the deed, seems to coincidental and kind of unlikely. But, the writing was very enjoyable and captivating for me. You had some lines that were really nicely well-written and made me become engorged in the writing. It was nice.

Vote: YDK