Timeless.
I meandered through this excerpt with little reaction. I merely grazed on the food for thought you offered up. Was not nearly "convinced" - Nor satisfied. I did enjoy the baked chip line - neat little tidbit. Giving this a D+. It barely passes on adequacy. Write with more coherency and purpose. Save your scribble.
Poet Minded.
I think you described it best when you referred to your submission as an interesting mess. Couldn't tell you what I just skimmed over. It wasn't because I was skimming either. Your style of writing is simply 'skimmable'. Head back to the drawing board,
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