Rakontur: I loved the format actually, I pointed out a Pinot Grij drop of recent that opted for the paragraph style in league competition and he did exceptionally well with the rhyme placement etc to give it a natural rhythm and cadence which carried the flow.
I almost agree with Mr. J here in that the letter format does tend to give you a conclusion in mind prior to having read it, but I don't think that fully does you justice here. I enjoyed the piece. It opened up well and told its own story, almost like a snippet in time if not the whole thing with every detail - but hey, how much do we really know about someone, other than what they let us in and see or know? I guess we never really, truly, do and I give you a little leeway in that sense here because it made the character more true to life for me that way.
Dancake: I love your knack for twisting a turn of phrase, making something I've never read or heard sounding like an idiom I'm already aware of somewhere in my brain. Your opener was a great one here in that sense, lulling me in with "I hear her piano in my pocket of coins" great visual. Superb writing.
You came back stronger than you left I think, there's little rust here at all. It's a very polished performance and (purely from your personality on the board and whiskey musings) felt regaled than you perhaps meant it to be. This hits right in the feels.
Great battle but I'm going with Dancake here bruhs!
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