Lars
Thst ease of writing just spews out in everything you write lol.
This was anothet example of the skill you possess. Great imagery
In this piece tbh. I think thats the biggest thing i got out of this piecd
Personally. You painted a unique tale that frlt honest and natural while
Vividly describing the scenes. Dopeness all around.
Mmlp
Interesting you tried to tie those 2 images. I think thats where you faltered
Because individually each stanza stanza stands alone nicely i just think when put
Together both ideas lack that cohesion to make the transition smooth and beautiful lol
Dope piece though but i feel like lars didnt skip a beat while you did for a quick sec
Giving lars that edge to take this
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