Really enjoyed Lars's verse here. Poetic prose. Sounds like you could have been recanting this story in person and it would be delivered the same way, the punctuation/ division of lines helped meter this out perfectly. Subject is almost a bit mundane and played out, but presented playfully. The focus was less on the relationship and more on the wordless battle and how it plays out. Pretty fucking cool shift of perspective, though I can't relate too much (yet).
MMLP had a cool little verse, I think the structure was a nice stab at poeticism. Interesting second topic choice, didnt really work for me. The verse itself was good, slightly shallow. I think it needed a more personal or humanizing element to make it feel fresh
Nice battle but i got Lars
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Originally Posted by PancakeBrah
I'm going to start off on a tangent.
when I write, lately, I feel as if I begin by stringing together ambient ideas and concepts, then i realize I'm just typing the words coffee, tawdry, and autumn over and over and over, again, then I pass out dru-
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