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Dr. Dog: I love reading your efforts. Evening it's not in a style I'm used to, you have a real flare to your writing I admire. A turn of phrase, I guess? Similar to dead man in that you almost bombard the reader with these titbits of imagery or unique wording, making even the smallest details interesting. The iPhone weather report thing is a great example of many used, it gives it a modern life feel and makes it relevant to our age range which I don't see many writers do. I like that. The times I could have done without, but the tie in to the quote was done well also. Really solid prose here. I was impressed.