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Old 08-22-2015, 10:16 PM   #6
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You guys faced not that long ago, and last time Rakantour blew away Innovator, including others who have tried to take away the championship title away from him, including myself.

Rak: I took this as a depiction of destruction, in which those who were being destroyed became aware of their own ideologically derived emotional states are fallacies in the grand scheme of things, in which silence is the prevailing theme that subjugates the stream of consciousness and the rest of the contents of our hard drives are wiped clean through oblivion, which you corresponded with peace. Some nice lines such as, sun soaked eyes and many more particularly in the first stanza. One line I did not like is matter got ate, sounded strange, also the FML and OMG's was too amateurishish. But, aside from that I have no qualm.

Innovator: Dang, this is my favorite thing I've read from you. Enjoyed the sensory deprivation, which is not hard to do from a writing standpoint, however when you added all this beautiful imagery via using the other apertures to depict how a blind person sees through his other senses and how he sees was quite a joy to read. Although, not the most brilliant concept. it is nevertheless extremely well executed.

I liked Rak's take, but Innovator took the cake here.

Vote: Innovator

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